Monday, December 27, 2010
Persuasive Argument
Good evening ladies and gentleman , i would like to bring upon the brutal case of Mr. Hyde. Before i start i would like to bring in the maid that had seen the murder of Sr. Danvers Crew live. "miss , what exactly did you see outside that night?" "...(worried) uhmm.. welll... i saw a very strong man , kill Crew with his cane... and all i was doing that night was quietly minding my own buisness, and staring out the window and i happened to see this incident." "okay, thank you that is all." As everyone can see, we have a witness that pleads that Mr. Hyde is guilty. Please consider the fact that he had performed a similiar task , he had trampled a young girl at 2 am. "please come in young one." "hello, *sniff sniff* i was walking to my mummy and this big man steps on top of me, i cried so much, i hate that man!" What type of ordinary man goes around in canes, and in the middle of night killing and trampling people? Mr. Hyde is guilty, and we all know that. Not one person has yet been on Hyde's side, not saying that he should be prosecuted. Mr. Hyde do you have anything to say? "arrrrghhh nooo" "Case closed, Mr. Hyde is now stamped guilty" said the judge.
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Simran,
ReplyDeleteGreat start! I like that you have considered some of the evidence and witnesses that would help prove your case against Mr. Hyde. However, remember that you are writing the closing statements for the case as per the Blog assignment. Therefore, you are to focus on highlighting/recapping the evidence/witness statements and other facts that were brought to light during the trial. You do not need to write as though you are calling the witnesses up at that moment, for at the time of the closing statements that part of the trial is already finished.
Just as with any other writing, you need to craft an introductory and closing statement that is both powerful and captivating. The middle of your writing/speech should reveal your reasons for Hyde's guilt (separated by paragraphs). Inside each body paragraph remember that you need to fully support the reasons by recalling all of the evidence, witnesses, and other facts that help prove your point of view. Try watching some courtroom TV dramas or view some youtube clips of courtroom closing statements in order to get a feel for the language and phrases that are common in this type of writing/speech. This will help to give your writing authenticity.